Score: 2

"Good try but..."

submission: The Legend of David prt 1

date: February 2, 2007

The graphics were good, the attempt was awesome, only one thing...

It's pretty much the exact thing as the game... You added one or two jokes and stuff... but I guess we're mainly supposed to laugh at the fact that link is played by some 30 yr old guy o.o...

It went too slow for the sarcastic or ironical remarks to really be funny, try skipping around, or a faster style :/

All in all definitely a good try though!

Good luck in the future!

Score: 8

"Confused"

submission: Hewitt

date: February 2, 2007

I did everything myself so far, but I can't find the combination to the locker... I tried some numbers but I dunno where I have to click once I've put a combination in...

Any help anyone?

Score: 8

"Good Potential"

submission: Eternal Descent Teaser

date: November 14, 2006

Ok, I'm going to be honest with you, maybe blatantly.

The Art was good, but the image of her falling was almost exactly the same (If not the same in actuality, just don't want to say definetely in case it's just really similar...). The movement was choppy and with little detail. The part where the male protagonist is being attacked by some monster hand basically just move the character back and foward while the reflected animation of an arm switches back and foward. Use way more parts next time, show the movements of the arm, change the angles, change the character, make the guy move or do something, anything to show a little more action next time.

The female needed more than just a profile view.

It was way too short, and though it's a teaser it's too short even for a teaser. And considering how short it is the art should be of much higher quality when taking the short amount of scenes needed. And more movements of parts too, like the wings, and such.

But now to the good parts :)

The music was really well fitted and was just loud enough. Awesome way with the buildings there. The shading is well done. The detail on the characters are well done and I understand how difficult it is to make the moving hair and all that look good to props to you. It's important when creating characters to realize that the more detailed and more time you spend drawing the characters means more time spending to make each piece move independently. Also that you must make sure you keep all those things shown from more than one angle. Try to keep your animation and your drawing equal or else you'll draw more attention to something you don't want to and vice versa :)

The legs of the angel looked a bit funny but moved smoothly.

The male's hair was really well animated and nice job on the skirt flapping differently than the hair and making us feel at which speed she was falling :)

And the fog in the begginning was well made :)

Y'all might notice that there's alot of comments here and yet my grade's still high. Well first of all I only comment when I know an artist might actually find it useful. Secondly it definetly shows more potential than some of the other stuff we see here. And thirdly, one can find flaws on anything, and it doesn't draw away that the art was amazing anyway. If you want to complain go try to do something better than that...

Nice vid, and looking foward to your series, and don't rush it.

Good luck!

Sapphy

Score: 8

"Good :)"

submission: Joker and the Thief

date: October 2, 2006

This was an awesome experience, and definetely entertaining. Ya could make a sequel with more escapades, but either way the open ending was good enough.

The music was awesome, although I'm still wondering who "the thief" is... I mean that was the jokerman's story, where's the next half??? >:3

The art needs work. You covered it up pretty well, and if most of newgrounds' awesome art had half the story and style to it your flash had we'd be set. However either way the truth of the matter is there's overusage of the 3D environment thingers, and limited variety of characters or body parts :( I'm sure you thought the 3D thingersmajigers were cool but they were sort of bland and gray and such. But you'll get there with practice! :D

The style was amazing! The "eep" the "nono come closer" and all the rest were really well used! (Next time make the kapow thing faster and smaller).

I gave it a 5 anyway because it deserves higher than the 3.5 it has, but either way you've shown awesome skills that just needs some more polishing :)

P.S. That's a HUGE file, if I was on dial up I would've been figgering med! XD

Score: 9

"Foi Horrivel!"

submission: Squaresville

date: September 17, 2006

Como voce ousa a fazer uma coisa tao feia assim?!

BLAM!!!! Esse troco horrivel!!

No Jk :p Was just too tempting to pass up the opportunity to say something in pork-N-cheez :D

Anyway it was great, the graphics were awesome and was just random enough :)

Keep making more!

Score: 8

"Pretty good."

submission: God Digs my Daddy

date: September 11, 2006

You know, I'm not an atheist, I'm sorta the second cousin of an atheist.

Basically I believe that there's a god, or something higher be it physical or abstract. But I think that the world is too messed up, and the words have re-tempered in the bible or other holy books so any shred of truths left have probably been lost in translations and greedy men's minds.

Basically I believe that we can't tell what's true anymore. So I won't be like hypocritical christians, or god-hating atheists (because though the large majority are actually caring christians, or calm and nice atheists both are overshadowed by the "loud minority").

So instead of adhering to some book, or some person. I just do what I feel is good and right, because I think if you listen to your true self you can always tell what's good or bad without someone standing over your shoulder. And I hope that when I die whatever waits will understand.

A real person doesn't obey a religion because they're scared of burning in hell, because they think some being is watching them, or even to please the "Creator". A real good person does what they think is good simply because they think it's good.

What's funny about this story in the bible isn't really what happened but how it's used today. It's usually used by Christians in 1 of 2 ways.

1: Don't make stupid pacts with God because you'll lose something.
What this means: Why the heck does she have to be sacrificed for his stupidity instead of God striking HIM down! This is supposed to have the subtle connotation that a woman does what a man decides quietly. And that she is something to be sacrificed. Also that children are expendable, a common theme in the bible for some reason. Job is stricken with leprosy, loses land, money, and all his kids because the devil dared/bet with god that Job would denounce God. God wins so he gives Job everything again twice. So now he has twice as many children as before... so it does not matter that it was different kids, only the number mattered not that they were people...

2: Men are worth more than women.
What this means: When Abraham goes to sacrifice his son. God intervenes and gives him an animal. So aparently substituting is ok for a male. When she is to be sacrificed, god not only does not intervene, but says that her only sadness is that she wont be married and grow old..... that she will miss what men can give her. This is used in some beliefs like Amish and such to again emphazise the need for a woman to sacrifice herself. It also shows how an animal is below a man, but not a woman because she herself is like a servant, or an "it" when the guy says "it" will be sacrificed.

Christians rebuttle: Things change and after Jesus came is when everything was good. Before was like a different time.

Nice flash too :3 (I talk alot...)

Score: 2

"Add subtitles next time..."

submission: LL-The Horizon

date: September 6, 2006

I really tried to understand it because after reviewing some other recently reviewed crap this actually looked good.

And though I hate the clock-like stuff, i've seen worse art...

Gave it a 1/5 because it was pretty much all "blahblahtextreaderblah" to me and didn't get anything.

Score: 9

"Great idea."

submission: Life Factory

date: September 3, 2006

We definetely get alot of weird ideas like that. It's great that you actually went through and made it :)

I have to admit the matrix-esque thing was a bit too cliche it, but nonetheless very entertaining. Work a bit more on your art work and you'll go far :)

Thanks for an addition to my favourites! :)

Score: 6

"Kind of ok."

submission: A Gift for Peach

date: August 10, 2006

Try a bit better humor next time.

Even more violence, like beating Luigi bloody or beating peach and taking her would've been a bit more entertaining.

also, make it bigger.

Making it smaller and more compact wont hide the fact that you're using sprites...

Some sprite movies are awesome, but it's getting a bit old. To overcome the bad association you have to do something really interesting...

Good luck next time :)

Score: 8

"Awesome Job."

submission: Stick Omen Hybrid

date: August 10, 2006

Really entertaining.

You should make it a lil bit longer and bigger next time.

Otherwise it was really enjoyable. good luck on your next one!